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When we are asunder,
I speak so cautiosly,
Using the sweetest of elegies.

Pondering out fate,
My eyes do turn crimson,
Oh, just a touch of red.

Feelings of yesteryear,
Those are so melancholy,
Though I shall not regret.

Bloom like the amaranth,
Unto thy world, radiate,
Unlike my dissonance.

Here I am so desolate,
Still out of reach,
Flailing to bring you near.

Waiting for catastrophe,
Fate deals the dirty cards,
A false sense of security.

A consolation prize,
My only posession.
The rest, out of reach.

Cruel indignities,
I'm ostracized from us,
Now it's only you and I.

Sweet sounds into my ear,
Oh, it gives me hope,
The words you speak.

The banality of it all,
To love than lose,
Only to regain.
©2006-2010 ~munson
:iconmunson:

Author's Comments

This was written with someone/people in mind. I know, I'm a hopeless romantic, but I just can't help that.

I have to admit, though, I used a lot of very eloquent vocabulary in this piece that I do not use on a regular basis.

Well, enjoi!

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:iconsweetiepi123:
Well I love this poem. You know why. Its beautiful.

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DONT MESS WITH MY FRUITY PEBBLES!
:iconmunson:
Becasue it's beautiful? Thanks fo the compliment!

:D

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"Swept off my feet, with step by step by step we take the lead as drop by drop, we start to bleed"

"Dancing Through Sunday" by AFI
:iconsweetiepi123:
ha ha, no...well yes it is but...OH NEVER MIND! POOPY!

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DONT MESS WITH MY FRUITY PEBBLES!
:iconmunson:
...

Okay, I guess.

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"Swept off my feet, with step by step by step we take the lead as drop by drop, we start to bleed"

"Dancing Through Sunday" by AFI
:iconmiseria-cantare:
I msut say, when I read what you said about your eloquent vocabulary I was hesitant to read it. Normally when ppl say that it means they threw in alot of big ass words, and expect that to gain them poetic cred, but I was pleasantly suprised by this piece. You've used a lot of words I happen to love, like amaranth and banality, which begs the question: are you an AFI fan?

i liked it alot. you managed to speak eloquently without being to wordy, something that takes much skill.

good job!

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In the place where long grass opens, the girl who waited to be loved and cry shame erupts into her separate parts, to make it easy for the chewing laughter to swallow her away.
-Beloved, Toni Morrison
:iconmunson:
Ha ha, why thank you, and yes I am an avid AFI fan. I was listening to Sing The Sorrow, and I was inspired. I borrowed a word or two, though... :( It's a pity I can't write that well.

Thanks for the compliment, though!

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"Swept off my feet, with step by step by step we take the lead as drop by drop, we start to bleed"

"Dancing Through Sunday" by AFI
:iconmiseria-cantare:
aw well, if we all aspire to write on the same level as davey havok, most of us will fail miserably.
the untitled track on STS is what inspired me to start writing, back when was it... 3 years ago? something along those lines

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In the place where long grass opens, the girl who waited to be loved and cry shame erupts into her separate parts, to make it easy for the chewing laughter to swallow her away.
-Beloved, Toni Morrison
:iconmunson:
At the very end of the album? After "...but home is nowhere"? Yeah, that's really good. I don't like the story that is between them, though. It's written well, but sounds stupid. Good stuff, though. I'm really looking forward to their new album!!! 6-6-06!!!

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"Swept off my feet, with step by step by step we take the lead as drop by drop, we start to bleed"

"Dancing Through Sunday" by AFI
:iconmiseria-cantare:
haha, i was referring to the story. the one told by the little boy, davey, and the old man. not this time imperfect.

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In the place where long grass opens, the girl who waited to be loved and cry shame erupts into her separate parts, to make it easy for the chewing laughter to swallow her away.
-Beloved, Toni Morrison

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